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Post by lexer on Jul 7, 2008 13:23:44 GMT -7
Weapon name: giriyu
Appearance: large sword and it's sorda rusted on the bladed part
Power:N/A
Limitations:Heavy and it slows him down but when he swings it, it comes down with more force
History: It was hand made by a single blacksmith then it was given to the cheif of the demon slayer clan. Then stolen by a wolf demon who then sold the sword for over a 1,000gold then stolen by Taishu.
Name: Taishu Tori
Race: wolf demon
Profession:Wanderer
Powers/Abilities: darkness abilities
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Post by 都Tsuzuki筑 on Jul 8, 2008 6:21:11 GMT -7
Okay, there's a few problems 1. Be more descriptive with the appearance. (What color is it hilt? what's that made of? Does it have any patterns?) 2. The limitations section is more for limitations on powers. 3. Your history is a little choppy; it needs proper wording and punctuation. Could you also try to make it a bit longer/more descriptive? 4. Powers and abilities mean specific attacks and such that they can do; you need to give a name to and a description of exactally what powers he has. (Like Inuyasha's Blades of Blood, or Sesshomaru's poison claws.)
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