Sample bad post(from here). I'm sorry I used your post as an example {~Riku&Raku Kano~}, it just stood out to me.

"There's nothing to do in this damn place," Riku snapped. The boredom was getting to her. She barley got bored it was usually Raku got bored not Riku. She sighed out of boredom again "What the hell I'm so freakin' bored!" She yelled.

As you can see, this is really short, which it shouldn't be. There are many ways to lengthen a post. Click here for suggestions(courtesy of Zuki) on how to lengthen a post. There are also spelling/grammatical mistakes, although that is a completely different problem right now.

Now, here is a post from the site ;; paradise pier. It is the same level of roleplay as we are(intermediate/advanced). However, I'm sure you can see the differences immediately.

It was dusk, or just close enough to dusk that the sky was beginning to change colors. What had been a simple blue only moments before was now turning pink and orange, lit by the setting sun. The clouds off in the distance were also colored, though they looked far more purple. Mulan smiled serenely as she made her way down one of the paths toward the ocean. It reminded her of home, to see the sky like this... though at home she used to go and sit on the roof of the house, not on the beach. The beach was preferable, if she did say so herself. So long as she was careful and kept herself from getting cut by one of the rogue seashells that was half buried in sand.

Which was really easier said than done for a klutz like her. She had a horrible tendency to get herself hurt, usually by walking into objects...or people. She had been trying much harder to stop doing that though, since arriving at Paradise Pier. And she was in fact succeeding, for the most part anyway. Since arriving she had only walked into two doorways, a table, and not one single person. Which for her, was a very good record indeed. Hopefully she could even manage to get it down to zero run ins altogether--though that may take awhile.

Mulan let out a breath of air she hadn't known she was holding when she finally reached the beach. So far so good, she thought with a small smile. Now, if she was lucky, she could manage to get back to her dorm later on without hurting herself too. Reaching the water she spread a pale blue towel down onto the damp sand and plonked herself down upon it. She could feel the coldness from the sand seep through the towel and through her thin white skirt into her, but ignored it. She had felt much colder back home, so this little chill was hardly much to be concerned about at all.

The light breeze at the shore ruffled her hair and sky-blue blouse ever so slightly, in a rather pleasant manner. It was nice... the way the waves lapped at the shoreline and the rocks a little ways off was calming, as was the occasional squawk from a seagull. It was, in one word, relaxing. The young woman stared out at the water, which was reflecting the multicolored sky. "It's so beautiful..." she murmured. Sighing, she pulled her knees up to her chest and wrapped her thin arms around them tightly to ward off the cold. "I wish I could stay here forever..."

Now your posts don't need to be this long, but you should at least try for two solid paragraphs. Again, if you need help, or suggestions on how to make a post longer/better, PM any member of the staff and they'll help you.